Improvements To Make To Our First Draft

To reflect upon the first draft of our film, we gathered a group of our target audience and asked for them to provide us with suggested improvements.

The first suggestion we received that appeared to be unanimous within the group, was that our initial draft was not long enough. The OCR specification that we are following requires our short film to fill a five minute time frame. Therefore we may need to have another filming day in order to collect enough footage to create a further 2 minutes of film.

Another improvement that was suggested to us was that we should alter the opening of our film and perhaps use the title sequence at the very beginning of the film. Upon further reflection, both myself and Lucy have decided that we are not happy with the montage at the beginning of the film as it appears out of place. We will therefore be beginning the film with our title sequence and then following that with the birthday cake scene in which the camera slowly rotates around the protagonist. This will therefore allow us to slowly build up the the fast editing sequences rather than jumping straight into it.

We have also decided that we would like to include some colour correction or a filter to the footage in order to create a more visually interesting film.